Baldwin 2-6-2

Here's a bit of fun for editors and English teachers. I quote the sign verbatim:

"The engine was built for the Santa Fe Railroad Co. by the Baldwin Locomotive Works, in 1902, & used in regular service on various divisions of the Santa Fe Railroad in New Mexico, for 51 years. It's last trip in railroad service ended in Belen, NM, July 25, 1953. As a gift from Santa Fe to the City of Las Vegas, April 25, 1956, by rail, to its present location in Las Vegas, New Mexico. It now stands on one of the shortest railroads in the world."

AAaaaaaaaaagh!!! misplaced apostrophe; too many commas; a sentence fragment (I'm good at those, too) ...

My version: This engine, built by the Baldwin Locomotive Works in 1902, was presented to Las Vegas, NM as a gift from Santa Fe on 25 April 1956. The engine worked various divisions of the Santa Fe Railroad Company ending its working life at Belen, NM on 25 July 1953 after fifty-one years of service.

I think "It now stands on one of shortest railroads in the world" is superfluous hyperbole. Locomotives are so heavy they need to stand on something substantial. At least the notice doesn't say the shortest railroad. But can a piece of track like that be called a railroad?Even my re-write (a first draft on the fly) could be tidier.

I think there is something very sad about static displays of machines like this. The engines at the National Railway Museum (Is it still in York?) look like they could be fired up tomorrow; and I expect some of them are.